Chapter 24: Awakenings

1. "--or did you think 'Ginny' was short for 'Gingivitis?'"I was surprised that a lot of people thought this was genuinely funny. I was trying to insert what I thought would be perceived as somewhat lame humor--because it always strikes me as unrealistic for every person in something I'm reading to be equally witty and ( Read more... )

Chapter 23: Flight

1. Hermione hit her head with her hand. "Oh! That ride on Buckbeak..." Harry remembered how she'd hated that.

Sorry, I couldn't resist throwing that in...

2. "Davies and Quirke took them to the infirmary, and it is my understanding that Madam Pomfrey has still been unable to reverse the effect of--of whatever it was you did to ( Read more... )

Chapter 22: Cho's Mistake

1. He had forgotten about Neville, whose mouth was open in shock. Then Neville’s brain connected to his mouth. "Aaaaaah!" Neville screamed.

Sometimes when you're extremely shocked there's just a slight delay in reacting, you know? Poor Neville. ;)

2. "Silver is the only thing that can kill a werewolf, Potter," Snape ( Read more... )

Chapter 21: The Dueling Club

1. The large black dog that had taken his place sniffed the floor and then went unerringly to Harry in his hiding place.

Having a dog Animagus for a godfather isn't always a distinct advantage. ;)

2. “Interrupt? What makes you think you interrupted anything?” Harry’s voice sounded unnaturally high to him.Again: ( Read more... )

Chapter 20: Dark Deeds

1. And yet, if he had let Snape die, he would have had a clear field. He had no way of knowing that Lily wouldn't be just as much Snape's girlfriend after the incident as before. Instead, she seemed to be impressed that he had saved the life of her boyfriend with no thought of reward....That was what had changed everything, ( Read more... )

Chapter 19: The Mind of Severus Snape

1. "Thank you for your help. I would've botched it, most likely." Snape? Harry thought, trying not to laugh.

And--I made Lily a potions wiz ten years ago. Mwahahahaha! (Man, did I enjoy the first time I read Half-Blood Prince!)

2. Suddenly, Lily pulled back and slapped him hard across the face ( Read more... )

Chapter 18: Boxing Day

1. "Dobby has them outside playing in the snow right now, if you can believe it. I think I'll check on them soon, make sure they're not trying to clean the windows or shovel paths to the greenhouses!"

I did enjoy doing Boxing Day at Hogwarts with the elves!

2. Harry made a face. "It's Wormtail who should have been in ( Read more... )

Chapter 17: Scars

1. Harry hiding in Fluffy's lair just seems very teenaged boy to me.

2. He heard a hissing voice under his robes saying, “Liar.” Oh, shut up, Harry thought.

So Sandy sometimes plays the role of Jiminy Cricket. ;)

3. Harry leafed through the book; in a table listing the names of those who were, in the author's opinion, the ( Read more... )

Continuing the 10-year anniversary annotation of Psychic Serpent...

Chapter 16: The Christmas Party

( Cuts are our friends... )

Chapter 15: Dueling with Snape

1. Ron had also come in for his share of admiration; Padma Patil, of all people, had wangled an invitation to the Gryffindor common room from her twin on Sunday, and she and Parvati had spent a great deal of time with Ron, who looked like he couldn’t believe his good fortune, surrounded by gorgeous twins who were ( Read more... )